This work stands out as a gem on Smashwords- where unfortunately there is an abundance of cringe-inducing dreck! Such is the price of freeing us all from the gatekeepers of the publishing houses- and one man's dreck is another's romantic fiction!
Heinlien's anarchist/libertarian societies with Julian May's mental adepts!
The tale, set 1200 years into the future, is on a world now home to refugees from earth, who have fled earth's oppressive governments. (If anyone has spare places on such a trip, please contact me!)
The author explore the conflicts between lovers of freedom and those who deliberately or unwittingly impose obligations and duties to others using the 'justification' of the insidious 'for the greater good'
I won't say too much more as I hate to give away a story!
Once I got started, I was stuck to the screen and damned if there wasn't a tear in my eye at the end of the story. Not many manage that!
Francis Porretto is an author destined to go far!
Nowhere else as Smashwords are such quality tales available so cheaply, so spend up!
I said 'Clip' instead of 'Magazine' in the opening pages!
Then forgot to edit it out before publishing.
I DO know better!
Thing is, with telling a story, sometimes you do have to stray away from the technically correct for your target audience.
When on subjects military, you need to change what would be the actual dialogue in order to make it comprehensible to the civilian reader. A string of acronyms which makes perfect sense to one who has served means absolutely nothing to on who has not.
I also tone down the language a lot.
If I used the work 'Fuck' as often as is usually heard in a conversation between servicemen, my word count would be boosted by about 30%! and this doesn't really add much to the tale!